You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall.You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:describe w

Essay topics:

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall.
You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall.
Write a letter to the manager. In the letter:
describe what the group does
explain why the group is good for the community
suggest alternative days and times for practice

Dear sir,

I am writing to request you for the permission to use the community hall in society for music practice every Tuesday and Friday evening. We got to know that due to some electrical fault we are not permitted to use the hall. we are a group of seven people and we always perform our musical show to collect charity for girl child education.However in next week we also having a live musical performance in Rajiv Gandhi college. Therefore I would like to request please permit us for the use of community hall.

Our group is also beneficial for community.We give free classes to people who are willing to learn music. some contribution of money use for hall maintenance too. It would be very humble if you allow us to use the hall for practice. I suggest that a time slot from 4 pm- 6 pm on Saturday and Sunday can be reserved. This can be further discussed and mutually agreed upon. I hope we have your cooperation and utmost support in keeping the cheerful moment alive and going.

Looking forward to hear from you.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: We
...t we are not permitted to use the hall. we are a group of seven people and we alwa...
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Suggestion: However
...ollect charity for girl child education.However in next week we also having a live musi...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ollect charity for girl child education.However in next week we also having a live musi...
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Line 3, column 401, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e also having a live musical performance in Rajiv Gandhi college. Therefore I wou...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...l performance in Rajiv Gandhi college. Therefore I would like to request please permit u...
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Suggestion: We
... group is also beneficial for community.We give free classes to people who are wil...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
... people who are willing to learn music. some contribution of money use for hall main...
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Line 5, column 263, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...practice. We are comfortable in changing day and time to use the hall.Lookinhg fo...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Lookinhg
... changing day and time to use the hall.Lookinhg forward to hear from you.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 702.0 937.175257732 75% => OK
No of words: 153.0 206.0 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58823529412 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72745654056 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 127.690721649 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62091503268 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 232.2 290.88556701 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9687391418 44.8134815571 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.75 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.125 16.8248392259 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 4.34317383033 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268800284487 0.216113520407 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131910968055 0.0766984524023 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520716513535 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229778418303 0.12726935374 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0235726080289 0.0580467560999 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 41.2886597938 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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