You are requested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to enquire about the course
Explain which course you are interested in
Tell what you know about the university
Explain why you should receive the scholarship
Dear Sir or Madam,
I have recently completed my graduation from the Singapore university of Technology and design and my major was engineering systems and design. I am writing to get the details about the scholarship program that your university offers as I am really interested to complete my Master's degree from your university.
I would like to pursue my Master's degree at the loughborough university and I am looking forward to getting a scholarship in the faculty of engineering system and design. As I want to build a career in the engineering sector, I would like to complete my Master's degree in the same faculty that I did for my graduation.
I am convinced that doing the post-graduation at the loughborough university would be an excellent decision for me as the university offers the opportunity to study a subject to an advanced level, develop personal and professional skills, and it is one of the best universities in the UK. The 440-acre single-site campus offers great facilities for students, staff and gives every student the opportunity they need to achieve their full potential. I would be very proud to be a part of this glorious university.
I want to continue my Master's course in engineering systems and would be able to do so only if I am granted a scholarship as I come from a middle-class family. my engineering systems and design graduation course had 138 credits in total and I achieve CGPA 3.89 out of 4.0. I have part-time job experience in the engineering design field and I believe I can prove my competency for the scholarship provided that I get an opportunity.
I look forward to your reply and would really appreciate your guidance regarding this.
Yours faithfully,
Lee Gordon
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Suggestion: jobbed
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, really, regarding, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 5.05154639175 277% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 32.9175257732 131% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1461.0 937.175257732 156% => OK
No of words: 292.0 206.0 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00342465753 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 3.78020617076 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12372886514 2.54303337028 123% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 127.690721649 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493150684932 0.622605031667 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.0 290.88556701 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.9082522596 44.8134815571 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.818181818 76.5299724578 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5454545455 16.8248392259 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.81818181818 4.34317383033 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0723198115383 0.216113520407 33% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0303026814152 0.0766984524023 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332892734862 0.0603063233224 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0408270683917 0.12726935374 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0257204934942 0.0580467560999 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 8.37731958763 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 70.7449484536 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 7.45979381443 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 8.71597938144 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 8.62886597938 174% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 8.15463917526 184% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 64.606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.75 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.