You are a secretary planning a corporate event Write a letter to Entertainment Company explaining the kind of party you would like to organize indicate the date and time of the event and your special requests

Essay topics:

You are a secretary, planning a corporate event. Write a letter to Entertainment Company explaining the kind of party you would like to organize, indicate the date and time of the event and your special requests.

Dear Sir or Madam,
My name is Liza Luis. I work for the Chicago office of Bank of America. I am writing to inform about the details of the upcoming event that you are due to hold for us.
This is going to be a Christmas celebration for approximately one hundred employees of our branch. We would like it to be a masquerade party with live Jazz music. Christmas decorations and the Christmas tree should be present. And also there should be a three course dinner including a desert.
The event will take part on December, 24 at 6 p.m. The guests will start arrive after 5 p.m.
We also have some special demands. We would appreciate very much if you could organize fireworks after the party. Moreover, we would like Champaign to be served in the end of the evening. Of course it will be paid by the company.
Please contact me if you need further information.
Yours sincerely,
Liza Luis.

Votes
Average: 8.2 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 140, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 4.92783505155 203% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 32.9175257732 55% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 737.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 162.0 206.0 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54938271605 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54600260184 2.54303337028 100% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.672839506173 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 225.0 290.88556701 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.6000400409 44.8134815571 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 56.6923076923 76.5299724578 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.4615384615 16.8248392259 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.53846153846 4.34317383033 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156029034262 0.216113520407 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489660320669 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517041454266 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0778494521569 0.12726935374 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272258969512 0.0580467560999 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.2 8.37731958763 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.22 8.71597938144 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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