Parents of obese children should be punished for making their children fat. Do you agree or disagree?
Some people claim that parents of overweight children should be penalized for allowing their offsprings to gain extra weight. However I disagree with the statement for the following reasons.
To begin with, mothers and fathers are not presented at school most of the time to ensure the young ones consume healthy food and have enough of physical activity . Many pupils prefer to eat fast food and sugary snacks because children are tend to choose delicious food over healthy one. And schools provide them with such opportunities by installing snack machines in school’s premises and offer unhealthy food in a school’s canteen. This type of everyday dietary accompanied with sedentary lifestyle can lead to obesity. Since parents cannot influence their childrens’ behavior while they are at school they cannot be fully responsible and if their offsprings become overweight.
Moreover, genetics play a crucial role in children’s’ obesity. If there are relatives who suffer from overweight in a family history, there is a high chance that their sons and daughters will inherit this condition. A recent study showed that genetically predisposed individuals develop obesity in 65% cases and neither extensive physical activity nor strict diet facilitates to a significant loss of fat in this occasion. Therefore, since parents are not able influence genetic factors they should not be blamed and subsequently punished for the shape of their children.
In conclusion, I disagree that parents are to be condemned and penalized for their children’s’ obesity because they are not always has a control over them and there are genetic factors that can’t be overcome.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51340996169 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14115644614 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605363984674 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1916894755 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.916666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.08333333333 7.06120827912 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300712076737 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112180689074 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109301276133 0.0667982634062 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21785823234 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0753878193628 0.056905535591 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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