In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?
All around the globe youngsters earn money by doing various types of work. It’s claimed by some people that’s a rather negative phenomenon ,whereas other believe children attain many benefits from the work experience. I am of the opinion that children should not take jobs as it would negatively effect some imperative areas of their lives impeding a healthy progression into an adult.
To begin with, a job would have a detrimental impact on children’s education. It’s necessary to spend sufficient amount of time on studying in order to successfully graduate from a school. However, an obligation to go to work may prevent a child from attending all classes, completing tasks and preparing for tests and exams due to a lack of time. Consequently, academic performance of these children may deteriorate and even result in expelling from school. It was evidenced by a recent research, that 65% of pupils received lower overall results if they have had part time jobs during semesters. Poor performance at school or failure to graduate may ruin opportunities for children to obtain a better career in the future.
Another argument that should be considered is that job duties may negatively influence children’s social development. Socializing and building friendships with peers is indispensable for a healthy development of a child. However, work environment is not suitable for children’s interaction with other people because often they are employed for manual routine work with merely occasional and rare social contacts limited to taking orders from their manager. This may result in isolation of a young individual and subsequently lead to difficulties in establishing healthy relationships with other people in the years to come.
To conclude, I believe strongly that an employment causes harm to children’s growth because their education and communication with peers suffers. Therefore, studying and meeting with friends should be a priority for a child to ensure a healthy development and therefore a prosperous future as an adult.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1759.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46273291925 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19318848225 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593167701863 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4658783705 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.266666667 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4666666667 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187551931965 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617647879319 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568009626246 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118414868976 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707997260141 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.