It's generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
Many people believe that significant achievements in sport and art require a natural talent whereas other claim that it’s feasible for any child to be successful in these areas if they receive a proper education and training. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument.
On the one hand, it’s easier to attain a success having an innate talent. It has been proven by various psychological researches that some gifted children are born with a set of genes that cause them to get more pleasure from drawing, making a music, doing some sport or dancing. As a result, these children devote a lot of time for practicing these activities merely because they enjoy it. Consequently, the frequent training boost their skills and they become very successful in the field that they choose.
On the other hand, excellent results can be reached by anyone if during early years of life a child receive an extensive support and encouragement from parents. It’s indispensible to have a strong motivation in order to pursue goals. When it comes to children it’s very important for them to have attention and validation from adults as it gives them a feeling of being special. For this reason, they work hard and eventually are able to reach a high level of proficiency in any field.
To conclude, although I acknowledge the importance of having a talent in such areas as sport and art for people to succeed, I believe that anyone is able to attain outstanding results in these fields if they have a support from parents or other significant people in their lives and deliberately practise and develope skills since childhood.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, so, whereas, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99636363636 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73574441801 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574545454545 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.2748378184 49.4020404114 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.909090909 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206300634771 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723545447639 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669563603097 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138348363331 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0766493021981 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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