In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?
All around the globe youngsters earn money by doing various types of work. It’s claimed by some people that’s a rather negative phenomenon ,whereas other believe children obtain many benefits from the work experience. I am of the opinion that children should not take jobs as it would negatively effect some imperative areas of their lives impeding a healthy progression into an adult.
To begin with, a job would have a detrimental impact on children’s education. It’s necessary to spend sufficient amount of time on studying in order to successfully graduate from a school. However, an obligation to go to work may prevent a child to attend all classes, complete tasks and prepare for tests and exams due to a lack of time. Consequently, academic performance of these children may deteriorate and even result in expelling from school which may ruin their opportunities to obtain a better career in the future.
Another argument that should be considered is that job duties may negatively influence children’s social development. Socializing and building friendships with peers is indispensable for a healthy development of a child. However, work environment is not suitable for children’s interaction with other people because often they are employed for manual routine work with merely occasional and rare social contacts limited to taking orders from their manager. This may result in isolation of a young individual and subsequently lead to difficulties in establishing healthy relationships with other people in the years to come.
To conclude, I believe strongly that an employment causes harm to children’s growth because their education and communication with peers suffers. Therefore, studying and meeting with friends should be a priority for a child to ensure a healthy development and therefore a prosperous future as an adult.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 149, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...that's a rather negative phenomenon ,whereas other believe children obtain ma...
^^
Line 1, column 307, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[7]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...ld not take jobs as it would negatively effect some imperative areas of their lives im...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 111, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... education. It's necessary to spend sufficient amount of time on studying in...
^^
Line 2, column 288, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a child to attend all classes, complete tasks and prepare for tests and exams du...
^^
Line 2, column 407, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ademic performance of these children may deteriorate and even result in expelling...
^^
Line 4, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ople in the years to come. To conclude, I believe strongly that an employment c...
^^
Line 4, column 52, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., I believe strongly that an employment causes harm to children's growth be...
^^
Line 4, column 230, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...friends should be a priority for a child to ensure a healthy development and ther...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48620689655 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2206250455 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593103448276 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0556266038 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.384615385 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189702634983 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669826796564 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587175480226 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117766718156 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0712465582397 0.056905535591 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.