In many countries’ children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
What is your opinion?
In various parts of the world, children are involved in different kinds of paid jobs. Although some people consider this as a mistake, others argue that it is as important for children as it provides valuable lessons about work, studies and responsibilities. I agree with the same.
There are some noticeable disadvantages when children engaged in jobs and getting wages. It is argued that this is not the age to earn money but to study, play and enjoy life. Earning at that tender age means they will be deprived of all that they are supposed to be doing. Even if they are working after school or in their holidays, when it doesn’t hinder their education, then it is their time to have fun and enjoy games with friends are affected. In addition to that, the earnings which come to their hand is another risky thing. They may not know how to spend wisely or to save it for the future. In this case, there are chances that they may end up in a wrong company and use it in the wrong way.
However, while working children will learn many life’s valuable lessons. Firstly, they will have the working experience. The child will have the practical experience of working, which will prepare them to face many challenges in the future while working. Learning from experience has its own importance. So, once the child is physically present in that working environment, they will have a clear picture of what he wants to become in life and this will motivate him towards education. This means that the importance of learning is clearly understood by the child. Finally, working and earning will make him more responsible. Completing the given task within the given time, cooperating and coordinating with other coworkers will develop him as a responsible person. Moreover, he will learn the lesson about earning the salary and how it is used wisely. The child will know to value money as he had earned it in a hard way.
To conclude, although the above argument highlights the drawbacks of children working and earning money, it is proven that the valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility they gain much higher and I completely agree with this.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a hard way" with adverb for "hard"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...know to value money as he had earned it in a hard way. To conclude, although the above ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 24.0651302605 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86898395722 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62495089142 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.7064315304 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7142857143 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8095238095 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.67935871743 184% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306202163812 0.244688304435 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889943661333 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928599738173 0.0667982634062 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21710428421 0.151304729494 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888591531522 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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