You are a secretary, planning a corporate event. Write a letter to Entertainment Company explaining the kind of party you would like to organize, indicate the date and time of the event and your special requests.

Essay topics:

You are a secretary, planning a corporate event. Write a letter to Entertainment Company explaining the kind of party you would like to organize, indicate the date and time of the event and your special requests.

<p style="font-size: 12px; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, &quot;Lucida Grande&quot;, &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; white-space: normal;">Dear Sir/Madam,</p><p style="font-size: 12px; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, &quot;Lucida Grande&quot;, &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; white-space: normal;">I am a secretary at Etrust Co Ltd and I am responsible for planning our company’s annual dinner party. I am writing to explain about our requirements for that party.</p><p style="font-size: 12px; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, &quot;Lucida Grande&quot;, &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; white-space: normal;">We would like to celebrate our company’s annual party as dinner party at Novotel Hotel on 17th October at 7:00 PM. Our aim is to have an amusing event for all of our staff members. In the party, we would like to start with a live music show before dinner is served.</p><p style="font-size: 12px; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, &quot;Lucida Grande&quot;, &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; white-space: normal;">We also&nbsp;<a id="tippy_2_link" class="tippy_link" title="want" style="color: rgb(0, 0, 255); border-bottom: 1px dotted;">want</a>&nbsp;to include a magic show after the dinner and before we conclude the event, we would like to arrange some indoor games&nbsp;<a id="tippy_3_link" class="tippy_link" title="which" style="color: rgb(0, 0, 255); border-bottom: 1px dotted;">which</a>&nbsp;all of our staff members can participate.</p><p style="font-size: 12px; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, &quot;Lucida Grande&quot;, &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; white-space: normal;">Apart from these, I would like to request an experienced event ambassador, who can speak both English and Mandarin fluently for this party as we are inviting some of the staff from our China branch office.</p><p style="font-size: 12px; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, &quot;Lucida Grande&quot;, &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; white-space: normal;">If you need further information you can contact me via email chris@etrust.com or call my office number 67890987.</p><p style="font-size: 12px; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, &quot;Lucida Grande&quot;, &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; white-space: normal;">Yours faithfully,</p><p style="font-size: 12px; color: rgb(0, 0, 0); font-family: Verdana, &quot;Lucida Grande&quot;, &quot;Lucida Sans Unicode&quot;, sans-serif; white-space: normal;">Chris Lambert</p>

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...hite-space: normal;'>Dear Sir/Madam,

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Line 1, column 1170, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...hite-space: normal;'>We also  ^
Line 1, column 1456, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...like to arrange some indoor games  ^
Line 1, column 1995, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ently for this party as we are inviting some of the staff from our China branch office.

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^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 2522, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , ...te-space: normal;'>Yours faithfully,

^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, apart from, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 937.175257732 257% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 312.0 206.0 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 7.70512820513 4.54256449028 170% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 3.78020617076 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 5.94549813392 2.54303337028 234% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442307692308 0.622605031667 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 290.88556701 217% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.41237113402 142% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 12.6804123711 32% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 78.0 16.3608247423 477% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 675.691867644 44.8134815571 1508% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 601.0 76.5299724578 785% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 78.0 16.8248392259 464% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.75 4.34317383033 224% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.29896907216 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0478657945758 0.216113520407 22% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481551914853 0.0766984524023 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0249481831203 0.0603063233224 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0478657945758 0.12726935374 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0580467560999 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 53.9 8.37731958763 643% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -41.53 70.7449484536 -59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 26.7 3.82989690722 697% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 38.4 7.45979381443 515% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 28.62 8.71597938144 328% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.79 7.59969072165 142% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 41.2886597938 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 37.0 8.62886597938 429% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 33.2 8.54432989691 389% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 8.15463917526 356% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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