You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter,say what the problem isdescribe the accommoda

Essay topics:

You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation.

Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter,

say what the problem is
describe the accommodation you thought you were getting
ask the provider to solve the problem

Dear Mr Watterson,

My name is Andrew Fish, and I am taking an eight-week intensive English course at Oxford House College. My company is paying for my tuition, and I am using my summer vacation to study. It is expected I will pass an English Proficiency Test as a result, and be transferred abroad. Therefore, it is rather important to me that I am able to study in the best environment.

I am staying in Phoenix Hostel on campus. While my room is pleasant and the facilities are very good, the hostel is extremely noisy. When I organised my accommodation, I was assured I would be staying only with post-graduate or intensive-course students. However, most of the people in this hostel are doing summer-school courses due to academic failure, and they are all under 22. It seems to me they are enjoying one long party: certainly no one observes light out or turns down music despite being asked to.

I wonder if I may be moved to a hostel which is more conducive to serious study, or I may use the remainder of my accommodation fee to go towards payment for a hotel.
I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
Andrew Fish

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 7.48453608247 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 947.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 204.0 206.0 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64215686275 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9260517978 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 127.690721649 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 290.88556701 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.463917525773 1078% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6354900986 44.8134815571 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.9166666667 76.5299724578 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 4.34317383033 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0963941955704 0.216113520407 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0355996457126 0.0766984524023 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417798676902 0.0603063233224 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0450055490285 0.12726935374 35% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249439585289 0.0580467560999 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 8.37731958763 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 8.71597938144 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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