Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:•Say why you would like to go on the trip•Sugges

Essay topics:

Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.
Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter:
• Say why you would like to go on the trip
• Suggest what you could do to help during the trip
• Ask other questions about the trip

Dear Sir/Madam,

With due respect I am writing you to express my interest to join the trip with my son Aryan, who is studying at grade five and carrying the ID number 2103-01.

Aryan loves to spend time with me always and he never stayed in any other places without me. As this is a foreign trip and new experience for him I would like to be with my son, so that he can feel homely and enjoy his activities.

In fact, I can look after the children carefully during the trip and help them learning new things. Personally I work in a kindergarten and I know well how to cheer up the kids.

It will be convenient for us in packing, if you can inform us some detailed information about accommodation, transportation facilities for sight-seeing etc.

Will look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Md. Shawan Shahriar

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 80, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to learn' or 'learn'.
Suggestion: to learn; learn
...carefully during the trip and help them learning new things. Personally I work in a kind...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, well, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 703.0 937.175257732 75% => OK
No of words: 150.0 206.0 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68666666667 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73918884993 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.72 0.622605031667 116% => OK
syllable_count: 199.8 290.88556701 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.13402061856 33% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.53403386 44.8134815571 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.875 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 4.34317383033 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120344443154 0.216113520407 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0463906220006 0.0766984524023 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324239184854 0.0603063233224 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0536898292177 0.12726935374 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02512405471 0.0580467560999 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 8.37731958763 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 70.7449484536 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 8.71597938144 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 41.2886597938 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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