You have been accepted to study at an overseas university, but feel a little anxious about living
and studying in an unfamiliar environment.
Write to the university’s student union. In your letter
• Introduce yourself
• Explain your interests
• Enquire about any relevant social clubs you might be able to join
Dear sir or madam,
I am writing with regard to a university admission that I got for the second educational semester in Computer and Technology faculty. I want to enquery about the clubs and university communities.
My name is Rahi Honarvar and luckily I was successful enough to get the university admission in Melbourne University. I have never had the experience of studying abroad and this makes me a little anxious.
I should mention that I am interested in Movies and sport, so I would much prefer to spend my leisure time doing these activities. I was wondering if you could tell me about the recreational facilities that university offers full time students. Moreover, I need to find a part time job to afford my expenditures, Is there any part time job opportunities in the university? I am a qualified computer programmer who can develop software programs; Moreover, I am professional in fulfilling the office works as well.
I would be grateful if you could send me the list of university clubs, so I can investigate it and chose one or two social communities to join. I guess it would be feasible for me to be part of these programmes.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Rahi Honarvar
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir or madam, I am writing with regard to a university...
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Line 6, column 132, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...my leisure time doing these activities. I was wondering if you could tell me abou...
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Line 6, column 226, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ional facilities that university offers full time students. Moreover, I need to find a pa...
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Line 6, column 273, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...me students. Moreover, I need to find a part time job to afford my expenditures, Is there...
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Line 6, column 327, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...to afford my expenditures, Is there any part time job opportunities in the university? I ...
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Line 8, column 145, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... one or two social communities to join. I guess it would be feasible for me to be...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r me to be part of these programmes. I am looking forward to hearing from you....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, moreover, second, so, well, i guess, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1032.0 937.175257732 110% => OK
No of words: 212.0 206.0 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8679245283 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06705353275 2.54303337028 121% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594339622642 0.622605031667 95% => OK
syllable_count: 336.6 290.88556701 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2225579329 44.8134815571 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0 76.5299724578 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 4.34317383033 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118623457843 0.216113520407 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473429332687 0.0766984524023 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040722528389 0.0603063233224 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0603440310315 0.12726935374 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388462267888 0.0580467560999 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.