You are a university student living in on campus accommodation You are having some problems with the internet connection in your room Write to the supervisor of your residence In your letter Introduce yourself Inform him her of the situation Request that

Essay topics:

You are a university student living in on-campus accommodation. You are having some
problems with the internet connection in your room.
Write to the supervisor of your residence. In your letter
 Introduce yourself
 Inform him / her of the situation
 Request that the problem be fixed

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing with regard to a problem that I have encountered recently with the internet connection in my dormitory room.

My name is Rahi Honarvar and I am studying computer and technology at Alef College who is living in on-campus accommodation, block A, room 24.

Since a few days ago I have learned that there has been some problem with my internet connection. Although I can connect to the internet while I am in the main hall, the connection is lost in my room. Consequently, I cannot work on my dissertation at nights due to the lack of access to the internet.

I would like to ask for your help in order to solve the problem which caused me some inconveniences and I have difficulties fulfilling my thesis that should be accomplished till the end of month.

Thanks for your consideration and I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
Rahi Honarvar

Votes
Average: 7.8 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...pus accommodation, block A, room 24. Since a few days ago I have learned that ther...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, look, so, while, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 752.0 937.175257732 80% => OK
No of words: 158.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75949367089 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9750336449 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 127.690721649 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.632911392405 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 228.6 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9221429604 44.8134815571 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 16.8248392259 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 4.34317383033 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238979396325 0.216113520407 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104659396496 0.0766984524023 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436450769587 0.0603063233224 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120659737442 0.12726935374 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0366138193377 0.0580467560999 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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