You have bought electronic equipment and within two days it started to go wrong write a letter to shopkeeper about your dissatisfaction with the product and services Ask him to find proper solution for the problem

Essay topics:

You have bought electronic equipment and within two days it started to go wrong. write a letter to shopkeeper about your dissatisfaction with the product and services. Ask him to find proper solution for the problem.

Dear Sir

I am writing this letter to complain you about the laptop which I purchased from your shop and express my grave dissatisfaction with this shopping experience.

Last Sunday, I bought the latest Dell laptop from your shop with i5 processor and 500GB hard disk. Initially, it was working fine but, from the second day of its use, it started troubling me.

Firstly, its' screen goes blank while working continuously for half an hour and I need to restart it by pressing the power button. Secondly, it started hanging a lot and applications take huge time to load, halting my work. Lastly, there is a issue may be with charger or a battery as sometimes, it do not get charged.

I am very disappointed after buying this product. I want you either to refund me whole money or replace it with new laptop with same configurations.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully
Malisa Thompson

Votes
Average: 6.8 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 241, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...load, halting my work. Lastly, there is a issue may be with charger or a battery ...
^
Line 7, column 299, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'does'?
Suggestion: does
...h charger or a battery as sometimes, it do not get charged. I am very disappoin...
^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...new laptop with same configurations. I look forward to hearing from you. Yo...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 764.0 937.175257732 82% => OK
No of words: 158.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83544303797 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71527101469 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.727848101266 0.622605031667 117% => OK
syllable_count: 219.6 290.88556701 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0224936754 44.8134815571 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.4 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8 16.8248392259 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.7 4.34317383033 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176656515709 0.216113520407 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591422705764 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359616984786 0.0603063233224 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0875699392982 0.12726935374 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0407386964892 0.0580467560999 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 70.7449484536 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 7.45979381443 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 8.71597938144 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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