You have heard that there is a part time job available in a nearby shop Write a letter to the shop s manager applying for the job In your letter Specify what job you are applying for Write about your experience and skills and why you should get an intervi

Essay topics:

You have heard that there is a part-time job available in a nearby shop. Write a letter to the shop’s manager, applying for the job.
In your letter,
• Specify what job you are applying for .
• Write about your experience and skills and why you should get an interview.
• Ask about the hours required for the job and give your preferred hours.

Dear Manager,

I am writing a letter to apply a part time electronic technician position in your new robot shop which you posted yesterday.

I just move into this town for a few weeks ago and looking for a job. I believe my background education and working experiences are suitable. My study background is in electronic engineering and graduated from Standford university for a couple years ago. I was working as an electronic engineer over 10 years in one of the biggest robotic companies in the world. I was a lead engineer in the automatic robot team, as well as handle a lots of robot project. My advance knowledge in application and management skill can help in your new robot shop.

However, I would like to get more information about the job, such as the shift hours and working hours in every week. I preferred the work after 1p.m because I need to take care of my grandfather in the morning. I can be reached on my mobile phone 12345678 and I will be available after 1p.m every day.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,
Suki

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 34, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...er, I am writing a letter to apply a part time electronic technician position in your ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... a few weeks ago and looking for a job. I believe my background education and wor...
^
Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...automatic robot team, as well as handle a lots of robot project. My advance knowledge ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...l be available after 1p.m every day. I am looking forward to hearing from you ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, well, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 892.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 191.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67015706806 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72026689458 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623036649215 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 277.2 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6579471299 44.8134815571 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.3333333333 76.5299724578 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9166666667 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247761872183 0.216113520407 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769158617716 0.0766984524023 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080908172674 0.0603063233224 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145279035271 0.12726935374 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102582700008 0.0580467560999 177% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 8.62886597938 99% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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