You have recently started for an new company.Write a letter to english speaking friend and In your letter:Explain the reasons why you changed jobDescribe your new jobTell him/her your other news.

Essay topics:

You have recently started for an new company.

Write a letter to english speaking friend and In your letter:

Explain the reasons why you changed job

Describe your new job

Tell him/her your other news.

Dear James,

How are you?.I hope my letter find you safe. I am writing to let you know that I got new job as pharmacist in a hospital . While my old in community pharmacy was mostly fine, I think that working in that new position render me huge opportunity to advance my career.

The working hours usually from 8 am till 8 pm which may seem long working hours ;however, that would be acceptable comparing to the salary they offer. I will be responsible for reviewing patients presceptions and dispension of medication besids, give them all education needed for proper use of medication after discharged from hospital. I am so excited to start as my first duty will be tommoro.

I also want to tell you that my sister widding may be in the first of August, so be prepared to travel to egypt to attend. your presence would be so amazing as that, I can introduce you to my family and my be we can visit some sightsees as you requested befor. Please send any plans so we can arrange together.

yours faithfully,

Ahmed

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
Dear James, How are you?.I hope my letter find you safe. I am writ...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... got new job as pharmacist in a hospital . While my old in community pharmacy was ...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...art as my first duty will be tommoro. I also want to tell you that my sister wi...
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Line 7, column 124, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Your
... prepared to travel to egypt to attend. your presence would be so amazing as that, I...
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Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: MY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'may be' or 'might be'?
Suggestion: may be; might be
...t, I can introduce you to my family and my be we can visit some sightsees as you requ...
^^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yours
... plans so we can arrange together. yours faithfully, Ahmed
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, may, so, while, i think, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 842.0 937.175257732 90% => OK
No of words: 185.0 206.0 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55135135135 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60643475632 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.654054054054 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 290.88556701 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.788187603 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.2 76.5299724578 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 16.8248392259 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 4.34317383033 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148627065199 0.216113520407 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677036762812 0.0766984524023 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594240336261 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0896423473253 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515412143183 0.0580467560999 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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