You did a one day course at a local college, but you are unhappy about it.Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter,- Details about the course- Why you are unhappy- Give some suggestions

Essay topics:

You did a one day course at a local college, but you are unhappy about it.

Write a letter to the principal of the college. In your letter,

- Details about the course

- Why you are unhappy

- Give some suggestions

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to let you know that i am not satisfied about the marketing course i had attended last weak in the college for many things.

first and for most,while the main reason for me to take that course was to update my knowledge, the presentation was outdated and the lecture was too short and lake of updated information as promised by the advertisement the speaker published on the internet.

Also, all the certificates for attendance still did not received yet;However, it may seem not big problem to you but that indicate the lack of organisation and diviation from high quality which your institution well-known for. Thus, you may let me suggest that all materials should be reviewed by experienced professors in order to add all latest researchs and statistics. Besides, making sure of firm timetable for all process's steps from registration till certification delivery.

yours faithfully,

Ahmed Mamdouh

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 35, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... I am writing to let you know that i am not satisfied about the marketing co...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...k in the college for many things. first and for most,while the main reason for ...
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Line 9, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...or many things. first and for most,while the main reason for me to take that cou...
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Line 9, column 261, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the speaker published on the internet. Also, all the certificates for attendanc...
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Line 13, column 57, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'receive'
Suggestion: receive
...rtificates for attendance still did not received yet;However, it may seem not big proble...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yours
...ation till certification delivery. yours faithfully, Ahmed Mamdouh
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, while, as to, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 32.9175257732 49% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 26.3917525773 64% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 803.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 154.0 206.0 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21428571429 4.54256449028 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99974699557 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.707792207792 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 16.3608247423 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.2460249591 44.8134815571 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.833333333 76.5299724578 175% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 16.8248392259 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.0 4.34317383033 345% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124870070199 0.216113520407 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579170775446 0.0766984524023 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417709541848 0.0603063233224 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0824412077848 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467498467168 0.0580467560999 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 8.37731958763 190% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 70.7449484536 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 7.45979381443 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 8.71597938144 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 7.59969072165 125% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 8.62886597938 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 8.54432989691 140% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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