You have recently visited a sports centre and discovered some problems and the poor condition of a changing room there You have made a complaint earlier but still no action was taken Write a letter to the facility manager about it In your letter Describe

Essay topics:

You have recently visited a sports centre and discovered some problems and the poor condition of a changing room there. You have made a complaint earlier, but still no action was taken. Write a letter to the facility manager about it. In your letter

– Describe the problems
– Include details of your complaint
– Say what actions you would like them to take.

Dear Sir,

I am writing to you to bring to your attention the poor state the changing room at your Dekalb facility is in. Please allow me to elaborate.

I have been a member of your gym since 2013, and never have I seen the locker rooms at your gym in such bad condition as I did in the past 6 months, which I think is due to the change in the maintenance staff. To name some issues, the washrooms always stink, the temperature knobs in the sauna room are not working and most of the lockers are jammed. Despite filing a complain to the staff incharge 2 weeks back on November 12, 2018, no action was taken. Moreover, after filing the complaint, the staff members started behaving rudely with me, and some even approached me directly and told me I was being nitpicky.

Because of all these, I am very disappointed and furious and I even thought of cancelling my gym membership, but since I have been a member of this gym for such a long time, I decided to stay and discuss this issue with the higher management. I, firstly, want you to discipline your new staff members and make sure they follow maintenance rules all the time, and also I want to see the changing room conditions improve as soon as possible, and I am sure I am not the only one who feels this way.

Thanks,
Truly,
Brent

Votes
Average: 9.2 (2 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 367, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... the lockers are jammed. Despite filing a complain to the staff incharge 2 weeks back on N...
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Line 13, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ls this way. Thanks, Truly, Brent
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, moreover, so, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1065.0 937.175257732 114% => OK
No of words: 242.0 206.0 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40082644628 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4214770259 2.54303337028 95% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590909090909 0.622605031667 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 322.2 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.463917525773 1078% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.8337835709 44.8134815571 176% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.333333333 76.5299724578 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8888888889 16.8248392259 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 4.34317383033 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202081640722 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730443941185 0.0766984524023 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652427409305 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145790556512 0.12726935374 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507222210193 0.0580467560999 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 8.37731958763 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 70.7449484536 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 8.71597938144 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 41.2886597938 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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