You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be suitable person to employ Say how you wou

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child.

Explain why you would like the job.
Give details of why you would be suitable person to employ.
Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply for the position of a live-in nanny which was recently advertised in one of the prominent Australian magazines.

First of all, I am currently in search of a new job and when I saw the advert, I thought this will be a good experience for me to be a babysitter for an Australian family. Even though I have never been to Australia, I think I will be able to gel nicely with the kid as well as the family members.

Back in my home country, I have ample experience babysitting toddlers as well as grown-up kids. In the last five years, I have worked with six families and all had a glowing review. I find kids to be a bundle of joy and having a close bonding with them gives me immense happiness. Talking about my credentials, I have completed early childcare development from a local institute accredited to the Indian government recently also undertaken an online program of the caregiver.

Being a wanderlust person, Australia has always been a place I have wanted to travel to. In fact, I already know about all the places worth visiting, including the Opera House, the Marine Reef and Bondi beach. There are also a few friends of mine living in the vicinity of your area whom I intend to visit on weekends.

I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Jocelyn Mascarenhas.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ring from you soon. Yours faithfully, Jocelyn Mascarenhas.
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, look, so, well, i think, in fact, talking about, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1112.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 241.0 206.0 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61410788382 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71788983519 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 127.690721649 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643153526971 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 353.7 290.88556701 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.8181510849 44.8134815571 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6666666667 76.5299724578 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0833333333 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 4.34317383033 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207494674306 0.216113520407 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0630441912016 0.0766984524023 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0483666916392 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107342397949 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400357102652 0.0580467560999 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 8.37731958763 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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