You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family
for six months and look after their six- year-old child.
Write a letter to the parents. In your letter
- Explain why you would like the job
- give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ
- say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing in response to your advertisement in Perth Today magazine of June 2019 edition.
I am a resident of New-Zealand. My children are studying in Canada and my husband has recently been transferred in the middle east for a project of 6 months. Since I am alone at home and experienced in taking care of young children, I would like to apply for a childcare job.
I have worked as a deputy's head in childcare from last 12 years. Working for such a long duration has given me enough experience to manage child, and how to keep them engaged in absent of their parents and follow the prescribed schedule given by guardians. Moreover, I am sincere, tidy, patient and hard-working. Therefore, my experience and sincerity towards the childcare will help me to perform this duty in a better way.
One of my cousin sisters has recently been shifted to the western part of Perth. So, when I am free, I can go to visit her and spend some time at her place. This will help me to spend my free time without being a burden on you.
If you have any questions, you can mail me at abc@gmail.com or call at 44553366
Hoping for a positive reply.
Your's faithfully
Rashi Patel.
Comments
Dear sir or Madam, This…
Dear sir or Madam,
This letter is about an advertisement published in a magazine for the requirement of a person to live and stay with you for six months and take care of your six-year-old child. I want to give my nomination for this role as I believe that the kind of character I am handling in my current company makes me a strong contender for this opportunity. Now, I am working in a day-care centre where I am taking care of kids of all age groups throughout the day, and I have ten years of similar working experience for different regions across Australia. Also, Being a mother of two adolescents, I am aware of all the requirements of a child. I usually spend my free time by exploring things at different locations as I am new to the southern area of Australia, I would love to go out, and I can also take your children along with me whenever kid wants to.
I believe you will consider my application for this role. Thanks for your time and consideration and forthcoming response.
Thanks,
XYZ
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...th Today magazine of June 2019 edition. I am a resident of New-Zealand. My child...
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Line 8, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ree time without being a burden on you. If you have any questions, you can mail ...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'Hoping' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'hopes'.
Suggestion: Hopes
...e at abc@gmail.com or call at 44553366 Hoping for a positive reply. Yours faithful...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 26.3917525773 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 988.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 215.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59534883721 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72934893193 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641860465116 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 301.5 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0844459595 44.8134815571 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.0 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5384615385 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.07692307692 4.34317383033 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133544318467 0.216113520407 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405871910435 0.0766984524023 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411325423082 0.0603063233224 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.072874785046 0.12726935374 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278032400584 0.0580467560999 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 8.71597938144 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 7.59969072165 103% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.