You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job.Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter,introduce yourselfexplain what experience an

Essay topics:

You have seen an advertisement in an English newspaper for a job working in the City Museum shop during the holidays. You decide to apply for the job.
Write a letter to the director of the Museum. In your letter,
introduce yourself
explain what experience and special skills you have
explain why you are interested in the job

Dear sir or madam,
I would like to apply for the job opening in the City museum shop that has featured in the Hindu newspaper today.

I, aparajita, am a first year student, pursuing history in major, from Aditya Birla college and my residence is in close proximity to the shop.

Not only I have keen interest in all ancient stuffs but also I had grown up with my grandfather who used to be a curator of the famous Ashoka museum of Panipath. I had spent my childhood taking care of antique items and had learned how to preserve them, from him.

this advertisement had grasped my attention as working here will give me a feeling of fulfilling my grandfather’s desire and will provide me an opportunity to feel his presence in my work. So, I am interested in this job and if you permit, I may begin as a part-time employee first. As the university vacations stars from next month but I will be able to join the shop from coming week after college time. Could it be possible for you to let me know the working time of the shop?

With the reasons cited above, I feel, I will fit best for this requirement. I hope you will take my application into consideration, awaiting your affirmative response.

Yours faithfully,
aparajita

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir or madam, I would like to apply for the job openin...
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Message: Use simply 'proximity'.
Suggestion: proximity
...ya Birla college and my residence is in close proximity to the shop. Not only I have keen in...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...learned how to preserve them, from him. this advertisement had grasped my attent...
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Suggestion: This
...ed how to preserve them, from him. this advertisement had grasped my attention ...
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Line 13, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rmative response. Yours faithfully, aparajita
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1026.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 222.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62162162162 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78468745355 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657657657658 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 327.6 290.88556701 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.8828267018 44.8134815571 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2727272727 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1818181818 16.8248392259 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36363636364 4.34317383033 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191457641705 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716209570294 0.0766984524023 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629678748279 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106654569659 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876213998792 0.0580467560999 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 8.37731958763 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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