you have seen an advertisment in an australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and loo after their six year old child.write a letter to the parents . in your letterexplain why you lie the job,give details why you be would be a su

Essay topics:

you have seen an advertisment in an australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and loo after their six year old child.

write a letter to the parents . in your letter

explain why you lie the job,

give details why you be would be a suitable person to employ

say how you would spend your free time while you are in ausrtralia

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing in express to the advert in the ''New Aspirants'' magazine a couple of weeks ago. In regards to need of caretaker for a toddler. Let me elaborate in details.

Basically,I am jessica a 26-year-old graduated arts student. I was enthusiastic upon reading, as all the requirements you mentioned were meeting my credentials.Firstly, i had done a nanny course from a prestigious institution. Overall, I do have hands on experience as well as insight depth information of partaking too. So, this was my main concern to prefer this occupation of serving for your child.

Seconadaly, I have an indispensable qualities of kindness,gracious nature and have a compassionate feelings for juveniles as this is my work and human nature too. Moreover, I have completed my study also due to this i was in thought of getting a job opportunity in a native country for my career advancement. This will be my first job so unlike other unaffordable caretakers i would not demand a high pay rate for my service. Although, i had grab this opportunity of handling and getting used of children during my training process and was paid enough also for extra hours.

Lastly, while my leisure time i would love to explore my course through libraries and online study in the new country.

I shall look forward to your favorable response.

yours sincerely,

jessica.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: IN_REGARD_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'regarding' or 'with regard to'.
Suggestion: Regarding; With regard to
...pirants magazine a couple of weeks ago. In regards to need of caretaker for a toddler. Let me...
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Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...et me elaborate in details. Basically,I am jessica a 26-year-old graduated arts...
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Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
...ly,I am jessica a 26-year-old graduated arts student. I was enthusiastic upon readin...
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Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Firstly
...u mentioned were meeting my credentials.Firstly, i had done a nanny course from a prest...
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Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ed were meeting my credentials.Firstly, i had done a nanny course from a prestigi...
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Line 5, column 306, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... as well as insight depth information of partaking too. So, this was my main conc...
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Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for your child. Seconadaly, I have an indispensable qualities of kindness,grac...
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Line 7, column 38, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'quality'?
Suggestion: quality
... Seconadaly, I have an indispensable qualities of kindness,gracious nature and have a ...
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Line 7, column 59, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , gracious
... an indispensable qualities of kindness,gracious nature and have a compassionate feeling...
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Line 7, column 101, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'feeling'?
Suggestion: feeling
...racious nature and have a compassionate feelings for juveniles as this is my work and hu...
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Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ave completed my study also due to this i was in thought of getting a job opportu...
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Line 7, column 377, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...so unlike other unaffordable caretakers i would not demand a high pay rate for m...
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Line 7, column 388, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ther unaffordable caretakers i would not demand a high pay rate for my service. A...
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Line 7, column 439, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...high pay rate for my service. Although, i had grab this opportunity of handling a...
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Line 9, column 31, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... hours. Lastly, while my leisure time i would love to explore my course through...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yours
...k forward to your favorable response. yours sincerely, jessica.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, lastly, look, moreover, so, thus, well, while, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1147.0 937.175257732 122% => OK
No of words: 231.0 206.0 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96536796537 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23225043723 2.54303337028 127% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 127.690721649 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.636363636364 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 364.5 290.88556701 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1422077877 44.8134815571 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.9285714286 76.5299724578 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 4.34317383033 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 2.54639175258 628% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142613799996 0.216113520407 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465008809105 0.0766984524023 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0285252311595 0.0603063233224 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0612668256599 0.12726935374 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383372072151 0.0580467560999 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 8.37731958763 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 70.7449484536 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 8.71597938144 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 41.2886597938 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.