You live near a record shop that sells music movies and books Write a letter to the shop asking if they have a few different items that you are looking for Ask what the prices are and if they can be orders Ask when they would arrive and if you can have th

Essay topics:

You live near a record shop that sells music, movies, and books.

Write a letter to the shop asking if they have a few different items that you are looking for.

– Ask what the prices are and if they can be orders

– Ask when they would arrive and if you can have them held in advance.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter with regard to check the availability of one of the harry potter book series and a few movies, in your shop.

To begin with, I am a resident of the village cheddar, south-west England nearby your shop. I want to know that, if you have these items' harry potter and the book of secret ', and the two movies named ' The conjuring', and 'The gladiators' in your stock. Moreover, in case of nonavailability, I was wondering, if I can ask you to order them to your shop, so that I can buy them from you. Additionally, give me information about the price of these items along with order details.

Furthermore, what is your expected delivery time. Do you offer express delivery? so that I could get my order in advance. As I want to present these to my cousin who is a great admirer of the book and die-hard fan of the movies, on her birthday which falls on 2 Oct.

I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest.

yours sincerely,

Votes
Average: 8.5 (7 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter with regard to ...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ard to check the availability of one of the harry potter book series and a few movies, in...
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Line 5, column 173, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...tems harry potter and the book of secret , and the two movies named The conjuring...
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Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ook of secret , and the two movies named The conjuring, and The gladiators in you...
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Suggestion: So
...ry time. Do you offer express delivery? so that I could get my order in advance. A...
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Line 7, column 82, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “so that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ry time. Do you offer express delivery? so that I could get my order in advance. As I w...
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Line 7, column 267, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...s, on her birthday which falls on 2 Oct. I look forward to hearing from you at th...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yours
...to hearing from you at the earliest. yours sincerely,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, moreover, so, to begin with, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 801.0 937.175257732 85% => OK
No of words: 181.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42541436464 4.54256449028 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60930589181 2.54303337028 103% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 127.690721649 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613259668508 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 290.88556701 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.83505154639 272% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6313854253 44.8134815571 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.1 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 4.34317383033 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.94845360825 177% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227370686875 0.216113520407 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752383211881 0.0766984524023 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06678336629 0.0603063233224 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101201415357 0.12726935374 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729438518216 0.0580467560999 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 8.37731958763 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.12 8.71597938144 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 7.59969072165 95% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 41.2886597938 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 8.62886597938 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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