You live in a room in college which you share with another student.However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find itvery difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letterdescribe the situatio

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.

However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it

very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

describe the situation

explain your problems and why it is difficult to work

say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir,

I am writing in reference to complain about my accommodation, room no 2345 which I am sharing with another student. Allow me to explain the situation in detail.

First and foremost my roommate bring his friends along to our room and they hold late night parties which affects my sleep. Since these parties happen every other day i am not able to study properly therefore the result is that i have failed miserably in my trimester exams. Additionally my roommate uses my personal belongings like laptop and college notes without my permission. Although i have asked him several times not to touch my personal items however he pays a little attention to what i say and keeps on repeating the same actions. My roommates uncooperative behavior is not only jeopardizing my studies but also making my personal life miserable.

Hence I would request you to allot me a single room with an attached washroom anywhere in the college campus immediately before the beginning of the next trimester exams so that i can focus on my studies.

I look forward to your response.

Yours faithfully

Kevin

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 100, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ur room and they hold late night parties which affects my sleep. Since these part...
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Line 7, column 169, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ce these parties happen every other day i am not able to study properly therefore...
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Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...failed miserably in my trimester exams. Additionally my roommate uses my personal belongings...
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Line 7, column 310, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'belongings'.
Suggestion: belongings
...exams. Additionally my roommate uses my personal belongings like laptop and college notes without m...
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Line 7, column 497, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ever he pays a little attention to what i say and keeps on repeating the same act...
^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...making my personal life miserable. Hence I would request you to allot me a singl...
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Line 11, column 179, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ing of the next trimester exams so that i can focus on my studies. I look forwa...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 933.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98930481283 4.54256449028 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74838218253 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 127.690721649 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.695187165775 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 290.88556701 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9325486635 44.8134815571 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3 76.5299724578 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 4.34317383033 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104249863709 0.216113520407 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431196642461 0.0766984524023 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518334675215 0.0603063233224 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0823962180175 0.12726935374 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052155116584 0.0580467560999 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 8.37731958763 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 8.71597938144 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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