You live in a room in college which you share with another student.However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find itvery difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letterdescribe the situatio

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.

However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it

very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

describe the situation

explain your problems and why it is difficult to work

say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is David Brownson and have recently joined your college who have opted for accommodation facility. On my arrival a month ago, flat number 202 was allotted to me which I am sharing with another student Sam Keating. I am writing this letter to express my dissatisfaction towards the problems I'm facing due to the poor arrangements.

Firstly, the bed that has been provided to both of us is a queen bed which is very uncomfortable. Secondly, the heating system goes off after 1.00 am and sleeping with no heating, in this chilly weather when temperatures go as low as -5 sometimes, is highly unacceptable. Not having a sound sleep and working another day affects my efficiency the next morning.

So, I would be really grateful if you could change my flat to another one which has twin bed setup. And, most importantly, which has a proper heating setup. I do not mind if you provide me a room with single occupancy.

I hope you will take a prompt action regarding my displeasure.

Yours sincerely

Amandeep singh

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...my dissatisfaction towards the problems Im facing due to the poor arrangements. ...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, really, regarding, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 26.3917525773 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 885.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 182.0 206.0 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86263736264 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84446150204 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.71978021978 0.622605031667 116% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 290.88556701 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5191411204 44.8134815571 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.4545454545 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5454545455 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 4.34317383033 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237995374079 0.216113520407 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0795084150939 0.0766984524023 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494226174662 0.0603063233224 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128196539184 0.12726935374 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047330201243 0.0580467560999 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 8.37731958763 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 8.71597938144 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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