You recently bought an expensive electronic product from store and found that the product does not work properly Write a letter to the store manager In your letter Complain about the problem Propose action for the store to take Request confirmation that t

Essay topics:

You recently bought an expensive electronic product from store, and found that the product does not work properly. Write a letter to the store manager.In your letter,

Complain about the problem
Propose action for the store to take
Request confirmation that this is agreed

Dear Mr.Smith,

I am writing this letter regarding to a new phone which I have recently purchased from your store. After I opened the box and did turn it on, I noticed that it is being restarted almost every five minutes. This issue has caused significant discomfort for me and I am asking you to find a proper solution to this.

Regarding to this issue, I would recommend to consider sending your colleagues to my address to collect my phone and return it to store. Also, if it is possible I need a full refund of my money spent on this phone. Another solution would be to replace it with a new and tested phone.

I would highly appreciate your co-operation and would request from you to send a confirmation E-mail regarding to agreement about my phone.

I have always chosen your store to purchase electronic stuff and it would be considerably amazing if you try to solve this matter swiftly.

Yours sincerely,
Jack Smith

Votes
Average: 7.7 (6 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Smith
Dear Mr.Smith, I am writing this letter regarding ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 34, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend considering'.
Suggestion: recommend considering
...is. Regarding to this issue, I would recommend to consider sending your colleagues to my address t...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 32.9175257732 106% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 776.0 937.175257732 83% => OK
No of words: 165.0 206.0 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70303030303 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.58402463422 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64969807868 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 127.690721649 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612121212121 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 241.2 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4404386451 44.8134815571 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2222222222 76.5299724578 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 16.8248392259 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.55555555556 4.34317383033 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168329914482 0.216113520407 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690935960155 0.0766984524023 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695497871667 0.0603063233224 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108366782415 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390045913182 0.0580467560999 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 8.62886597938 104% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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