Some people say that a person's success in the adult life is the result of the way they were brought up as a child by parents. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people say that a person's success in the adult life is the result of the way they were brought up as a child by parents. Do you agree or disagree?

It is true that the person’s achievement in life highly depends on the methods which has been taught to them by their family. I completely agree that the benefits of living with parents and using their help and support outweighs the other side of opinion.

Firstly, gaining experience from older people could be ideally beneficial for children and they could be well-educated than others who not taking advice from their parents. In addition, an individual who is staying with his/her family would eventually understand how to survive in this life and that would have financial support which could provide them enormous opportunities in their future life. For Example, in Iran, children have got all the attention and economical assist until they become married and independent.

Secondly, being wealthy and successful in near future has nothing to do with parents and their methods of education. Also, it would transform them into a selfish and weak person that could finally result in loosing self-confidence. However, government’s contribution to this matter should not be forgotten because it must feel responsible about younger members of society and provide them with extremely high-quality resources. In fact, local communities should be considered safe and put the effort to teach them in a professional manner to become useful. It would worth to mention that it totally relies on the person’s attitude and the way of adopting their life path. For example, an adult who has been raised in an educated family may not select their career as his future plan.

To recapitulate, obtaining excessive experience from elderly people could be incredibly constructive for adult’s future and this could advance them to become mature and advantageous among others.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 520, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a professional manner" with adverb for "professional"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in addition, in fact, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39285714286 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93361064706 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589285714286 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7896750294 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.833333333 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143791425789 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553098825032 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372447316 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878982214739 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170536664047 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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