You recently had your computer fixed at the local computer store however you are notPleased with the service you received.Write a letter to the store manager. In the letter- describe the situation- explain why you are dissatisfied- say what you want the m

Dear Sir,

I am a frequent customer of your computer shop and I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the repairment of my Dell Vostro E67, which has been done by your technical team on yesterday.

I handed over my PC to your branch to perform some regular updates and to install an antivirus. While receiving the CPU from your outlet, I was assured that the upgradation has been done and it is ready to use. To my utter disappointment, when I came back to my house, I found that the device is restarting on every thirty minutes. To make the matter worse, the CPU is creating an unbearable noise during operation with warning signals of overheating. I am totally annoyed with your troubleshooting team as I am not being able to make some important presentation for the upcoming business meeting at my office.

I would appreciate if you send someone to recollect the main machine from my house by tomorrow morning for further investigation. Also, I would like to request you to provide me a backup laptop for the time being so that I can tackle the ongoing emergency situation at my office.

I look forward to your reply.

Yours faithfully,

Kumar Sampad.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...orm some regular updates and to install an antivirus. While receiving the CPU from your outl...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 251, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... To my utter disappointment, when I came back to my house, I found that the devic...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 976.0 937.175257732 104% => OK
No of words: 205.0 206.0 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76097560976 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91087521668 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629268292683 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 306.9 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.882609996 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6 76.5299724578 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 4.34317383033 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12143932439 0.216113520407 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449234921615 0.0766984524023 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357247084541 0.0603063233224 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0705639076727 0.12726935374 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417657489354 0.0580467560999 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 8.37731958763 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 8.71597938144 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 41.2886597938 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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