You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realized there were some problems with the job.Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter:-- explain why you took the job-- describe the problems that

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You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realized there were some problems with the job.
Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter:
-- explain why you took the job
-- describe the problems that you experienced
-- suggest what could be done about them.

Dear Joe:

I am nathan from apple retail store R320, I am writing you to explain the difficult situation which I have met recently. I have joined our store for about one year as a specialist. The reason I came here is on account of the love to our brand. Personally speaking, the product of apple really changed my life. Therefore, I am proud of to be a specialist in our store.

Unfortunately, I met a problem since last week. It is the crank call form a customer who have asked me for my phone number once time. I think he may made some misunderstanding to me because he treated my phone number as the call center. Furthermore, he will call me at midnight to ask the question which how to use his iPhone. I feel exhausted on account this bothering.

I hope you could do me a favor, you can teach this customer the correct way toc asking for a help. For instance, he could dial the 400 helpline or coming to our store and looking for the support by specialists.

I look forward to receiving your response.

Best regards

nathan.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...m since last week. It is the crank call form a customer who have asked me for my pho...
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Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: ASK_THE_QUESTION[1]
Message: Use simply 'ask' instead.
Suggestion: ask
...hermore, he will call me at midnight to ask the question which how to use his iPhone. I feel exh...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Nathan
...iving your response. Best regards nathan.
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, may, really, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 856.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 192.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45833333333 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68935659385 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635416666667 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 290.88556701 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.13402061856 142% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 16.3608247423 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.9778830038 44.8134815571 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.1428571429 76.5299724578 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7142857143 16.8248392259 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 4.34317383033 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0960794286568 0.216113520407 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0286934489467 0.0766984524023 37% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348981254802 0.0603063233224 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0572712374163 0.12726935374 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317038452562 0.0580467560999 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 8.37731958763 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 70.7449484536 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 7.45979381443 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.0 8.71597938144 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 8.54432989691 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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