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You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job.Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: explain why you took the job describe the problems that yo

Essay topics: You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job.
Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter:

explain why you took the job
describe the problems that you experienced
suggest what could be done about them

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Dear Mr Chen,

I am Rona Lyn Olivar, one of the part-time receptionists at your Sea View Hotel. I have been working here since July and I have taken the job to gain some experience that I thought would be helpful for my future career. I am writing to draw your attention to a few issues I have encountered in the hotel. I am hoping that you would take steps to solve these.

I have noticed that some of the duty staffs at night shift sleep inside the hotel's quarter instead of being at the reception area. Literally, I and Lindsay- who is also a new employee, work and manage everything at night. They even do not bother to come to the reception area at busy hours when we have an influx of guests - usually on Friday nights. I believe this is against the rules.

Moreover, breakfast is supposed to be ready before 7:00 am but it is not the case. Sometimes the guests have to wait till 8:00 am for breakfast to arrive. Some of the guests have lodged complained regarding this.

I thought you should be notified about these irregularities. Duty officers at night shift should be reprimanded and warned so that they execute their duties. Besides, look at the recent complaints regarding the delay in breakfast serving and talk to the head chef.

I look forward to your response regarding this matter.

Yours sincerely,

Rona Olivar

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... would be helpful for my future career. I am writing to draw your attention to a ...
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Line 3, column 306, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...issues I have encountered in the hotel. I am hoping that you would take steps to ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...you would take steps to solve these. I have noticed that some of the duty staf...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
... to solve these. I have noticed that some of the duty staffs at night shift sleep inside...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...t till 8:00 am for breakfast to arrive. Some of the guests have lodged complained regarding...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... have lodged complained regarding this. I thought you should be notified about t...
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Suggestion:
...fast serving and talk to the head chef. I look forward to your response regardin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, look, moreover, regarding, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1115.0 937.175257732 119% => OK
No of words: 239.0 206.0 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66527196653 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52484529229 2.54303337028 99% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610878661088 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 340.2 290.88556701 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.8128683672 44.8134815571 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.6875 76.5299724578 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9375 16.8248392259 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3125 4.34317383033 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 2.54639175258 275% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103911035128 0.216113520407 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0344260183633 0.0766984524023 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0297300394234 0.0603063233224 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.05206427258 0.12726935374 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043879468427 0.0580467560999 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 8.37731958763 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 7.59969072165 99% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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