You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job.Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter:- explain why you took the job- describe the problems that yo

Essay topics:

You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job.
Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter:
- explain why you took the job
- describe the problems that you experienced
- suggest what could be done about them

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to you, with regards to the current issues that I have faced since last 2 weeks especially during weekends.As you aware of my things,currently I am pursuing PG course in Austin University. So, In order to help me out my personal conveyance, I had accepted an offer to work as a part-time employee in this company on last Month.

But, to bring to your kind notice that, I am facing issues in supporting during weekends owing to extended overnight support.For Last 2 weekends I was managed to reach home after midnight.Besides this, for recent quite days, I was also not provided with free dinner as agreed for this job. Apparently,this resulted in significant effects on my health.

I strongly agree with the fact, this company is in development mode and expect more customers during weekends.But, it would be great if you could arrange one more part-time employee to cater huge Customer`s crowd if possible. On the other hand, I would kindly request you to reduce my working mode and getting my dinner food regularly.

I hope to have you informed sufficiently and look forward on hearing from you promptly to discuss on same and sort out my personal issues.

Thanks for your understanding on me.

Yours sincerely
Ramesh

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Average: 8.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: As
...last 2 weeks especially during weekends.As you aware of my things,currently I am p...
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Suggestion: , currently
...uring weekends.As you aware of my things,currently I am pursuing PG course in Austin Unive...
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Suggestion: For
...nds owing to extended overnight support.For Last 2 weekends I was managed to reach ...
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Suggestion: Besides
...as managed to reach home after midnight.Besides this, for recent quite days, I was also...
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Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , this
...inner as agreed for this job. Apparently,this resulted in significant effects on my h...
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...ed in significant effects on my health. I strongly agree with the fact, this com...
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Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: But
...d expect more customers during weekends.But, it would be great if you could arrange...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nderstanding on me. Yours sincerely Ramesh
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, besides, but, if, look, so, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 26.3917525773 140% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1080.0 937.175257732 115% => OK
No of words: 215.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02325581395 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02938198632 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 127.690721649 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655813953488 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 322.2 290.88556701 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 1.44329896907 346% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 16.3608247423 141% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.4631471013 44.8134815571 197% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.0 76.5299724578 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8888888889 16.8248392259 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 4.34317383033 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 2.54639175258 314% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198660822158 0.216113520407 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0719449462845 0.0766984524023 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359343653866 0.0603063233224 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100842278339 0.12726935374 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177085244067 0.0580467560999 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 8.37731958763 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 70.7449484536 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 8.71597938144 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 8.62886597938 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.2 8.54432989691 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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