Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter with great dissatisfaction to share my experience of rail journey this morning. I am a regular commuter of East-West Line and have been travelling daily since last fifteen years. Till date, I have not faced any major problems or inconvenience as I did today. Therefore, I would request you to take an immediate action to avoid such a re-occurrence.
Firstly, I boarded the train at 8.15 am today from EW MRT station. Although the train was crowded and there was no room to breathe, still I give in to reach early for an important presentation in office. Little did I know that the train will hault half way, keeping all passengers in dilemma. We were clueless and were expecting that the train will resume as per normal in few minutes. However, there was no announcement nor any information was broadcasted regarding the breakdown. If there was any emergency or the train was delayed due to other factors, the railway staff could have informed us promptly. Since the doors were closed and no one could alight, we were stranded in the train with no resolution. Moreover, there were small children with parents and also some elderly with health conditions travelling in this train. This could have lead to casualties causing a great concern for the department in- charge. Furthermore, I was reprimanded by my boss for skipping an important meeting due to the delay in resumption of train services. Despite my repeated requests, I was issued a warning letter for punctuality.
Lastly, I highly recommend that there should be some rescue procedures in place for such situations. Additionally, a notice may be issued or some announcements shall be made known to the public affected. Specifically, not to mention that for this situation, I hope you can give me a written account of the day and time so that I can submit to my superiors. Possibly, this could help me waive off my letter. Also, for future you might be better prepared in the event of such situations.
Looking forward for your prompt response.
Yours faithfully,
Nur Amirah
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 7.48453608247 240% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 4.92783505155 264% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 26.3917525773 148% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.85567010309 337% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 937.175257732 185% => OK
No of words: 353.0 206.0 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92067988669 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 3.78020617076 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85124066071 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 127.690721649 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594900849858 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 290.88556701 180% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 12.6804123711 173% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4186088294 44.8134815571 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.9545454545 76.5299724578 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0454545455 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 4.34317383033 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 1.49484536082 736% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14311623907 0.216113520407 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389843960145 0.0766984524023 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468289425619 0.0603063233224 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0810964450097 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641030165404 0.0580467560999 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 41.2886597938 218% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 7.48453608247 240% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 4.92783505155 264% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 26.3917525773 148% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.85567010309 337% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 937.175257732 185% => OK
No of words: 353.0 206.0 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92067988669 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 3.78020617076 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85124066071 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 127.690721649 164% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594900849858 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 290.88556701 180% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.13402061856 153% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 12.6804123711 173% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4186088294 44.8134815571 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.9545454545 76.5299724578 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0454545455 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 4.34317383033 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 1.49484536082 736% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14311623907 0.216113520407 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0389843960145 0.0766984524023 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468289425619 0.0603063233224 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0810964450097 0.12726935374 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641030165404 0.0580467560999 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 8.37731958763 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 8.71597938144 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 7.59969072165 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 41.2886597938 218% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.