You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:• Explain why you&

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest to participate in the Himalayan trekking program conducted by your tour company. It has always been my dream and fascination to climb the Himalayan mountains and I consider this as a golden opportunity to fulfil my passion.

I would like to enquire some details regarding the tour package such as date of start of the tour, duration and pricing fare for an individual so that I can plan my trip and make the neseccsary arrangements for the same. I kindly request you to mention if any registration process needs to be done beforehand and the mode of payment.

I am aware of the fact that walking in the mountains requires good fitness and stable energy but unfortunately I am overweight and this is a major concern for me. I hope this will not act as a barrier to pursue my interest. Furthermore, I would like to know if any standard fitness criteria needs to be satisfied to be eligible for the tour so that I can plan my diet and fitness well in advance.

Looking forward to hear from you soon.

Thank You

Yours faithfully,

Alice

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 24, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...l my passion. I would like to enquire some details regarding the tour package ...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... beforehand and the mode of payment. I am aware of the fact that walking in th...
^
Line 7, column 164, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ght and this is a major concern for me. I hope this will not act as a barrier to ...
^
Line 9, column 17, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...ess well in advance. Looking forward to hear from you soon. Thank You Yours fa...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, look, regarding, so, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 32.9175257732 91% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 926.0 937.175257732 99% => OK
No of words: 199.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65326633166 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73792345452 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608040201005 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.5287402402 44.8134815571 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.888888889 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 16.8248392259 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 4.34317383033 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195520569658 0.216113520407 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874368122277 0.0766984524023 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591151723218 0.0603063233224 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107278914818 0.12726935374 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322190178718 0.0580467560999 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 8.37731958763 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 8.62886597938 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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