You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:• Explain why you&

Essay topics:

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter:

• Explain why you're interested in the tour.

• Ask for information about dates and prices.

• Express your concerns about your fitness level.

You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Sir or Madam,

You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this to let you know that I am very excited to go on a tour in mountains. I have always been thinking to explore an adventours trip somewhere in mountanious area because of my daredevil personality, but before that I have some concerns which I need to clarify first.

I work full time in a multinational company and it is almost impossible to get a week off from my work before Christmas. Therefore, if you could let me know about your available dates in the month of December, I would highly appreciate that. Moreover, I need to know about the prices as well, or if there is a discount for a group of three, would be great because I have 2 friends who are interested to join me.

Lastly, I just turned 48 this year and don't go regular gym. I am wondering if I'm too unfit for this tour, because I haven't done hiking since last 7 years. I seek your valuable suggesstions to improve my fitness level and what should I prepare for before taking this audacious decision.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Jay Cutler

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this to let you know that I...
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...s which I need to clarify first. I work full time in a multinational compa...
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...earing from you. Yours faithfully, Jay Cutler
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 903.0 937.175257732 96% => OK
No of words: 198.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56060606061 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66080623255 2.54303337028 105% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.671717171717 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 275.4 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9343569098 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3 76.5299724578 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 4.34317383033 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 2.54639175258 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173152966047 0.216113520407 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670375842697 0.0766984524023 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648419905003 0.0603063233224 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110387519232 0.12726935374 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357373513295 0.0580467560999 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 70.7449484536 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 7.45979381443 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 41.2886597938 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 8.62886597938 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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