You share your room with another student in the college hostel. You find it very difficult to study there because he or she always has parties and friends visiting.Write a letter to the hostel warden complaining about your displeasure with the room mate.

Dear Sir,

I hope you are well. My name is Anne Hughes and I am a 2nd-year Computer Science major student at CSUF and currently residing 18F in Hamilton Hall. I am sharing the room with two other students. I like the room, however, there are some issues with it. To begin with, it is not spacious enough for three people, we keep on struggling to manage our belongings. Secondly, it is adjacent to the main hall where students play music and watch television till late at night, because of this my grades are suffering and I am not able to concentrate on studies. Moreover, there is no privacy, as people keep on walking in the main hall all the time, it causes a huge disturbance. Lastly, ventilation and lightening is also an issue, there is no fresh air neither enough light which is affecting my health and eyesight. Therefore, to resolve the issues I would like to request another room preferably more secluded, spacious, and with enough light and air.

I understand it is the middle of the semester and it is difficult to find an empty room. But I will appreciate if you can arrange a room as soon as possible.

I will look forwarding hearing back from you soon.

Yours faithfully
Anne

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Average: 8.7 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS General Training

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, lastly, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 991.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 215.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60930232558 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59302221295 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 127.690721649 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641860465116 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 302.4 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3232459038 44.8134815571 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.2307692308 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5384615385 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.69230769231 4.34317383033 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208403349912 0.216113520407 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770487406632 0.0766984524023 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538840629046 0.0603063233224 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125192789532 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0489629801541 0.0580467560999 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 8.37731958763 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 8.71597938144 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 8.62886597938 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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