You travelled by a long distance bus recently and your suitcase was damaged.Write a letter to the bus company. In your letter inform the bus company of when and to where you travelled describe your suitcase and what happened to it explain why the

Essay topics:

You travelled by a long distance bus recently and your suitcase was damaged.

Write a letter to the bus company. In your letter

inform the bus company of when and to where you travelled
describe your suitcase and what happened to it
explain why the company should pay for a new suitcase

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a regular commuter of your bus service- Maple Tree Transportation, and I travelled from Edmonton to Calgary on April 5th. Unfortunately, my new suitcase was completely damaged due to the carelessness of your bus staffs and I am writing to claim compensation for that and would request you to investigate the issue so that it does not happen to any other commuter.

With regards to the incident, I took a bus from the Edmonton city station at 2.00 pm and reached the Calgary bus bay at 8.00 pm on 5th April 2018. I checked in a suitcase made by American Tourister and it contained my personal belongings. I instructed the bus staff to handle it with care. Unfortunately, when I arrived at Calgary bus bay and noticed my suitcase, its bottom part was completely torn down. I am sure this happened because someone very forcefully pulled it in and out of the luggage box. On top of that, the left wheel of my suitcase was also broken into pieces. This happened because your bus staffs bungled my luggage.

Mishandling of passengers luggage is not acceptable. My brand new suitcase got vitiated due to inadequate management and disregard of your bus staff. Therefore, I request a quick action in this regard and ask for full payment for the damage caused to the suitcase. I am attaching the receipt of the suitcase which I purchased last month. Also, talk to the bus staffs so that they do not repeat that incident.

Awaiting your reply and expecting an immediate action from you.

Yours faithfully,

Andy Odesa

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'belongings'.
Suggestion: belongings
... American Tourister and it contained my personal belongings. I instructed the bus staff to handle i...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, so, therefore, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1281.0 937.175257732 137% => OK
No of words: 269.0 206.0 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76208178439 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 3.78020617076 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81209013265 2.54303337028 111% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 127.690721649 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57249070632 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 398.7 290.88556701 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 12.6804123711 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7097827394 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0625 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8125 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.1875 4.34317383033 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303760675598 0.216113520407 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974269936476 0.0766984524023 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646251449745 0.0603063233224 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186284541746 0.12726935374 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513467989624 0.0580467560999 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 8.37731958763 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 8.71597938144 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 41.2886597938 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 8.62886597938 220% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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