You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the

Essay topics:

You went to the local hospital’s Emergency Department with your young child who had severe stomach pains. You had to wait for almost four hours before your daughter was treated by a doctor and, while you were waiting, you were constantly ignored by the other staff.

Dear Sir,

I am writting this letter to share my feedback about the service I received from your hospital.
I visited your hosital last sunday with my daughter to emergency department, since she had severe stomach ache.
We were waiting to get treated for more than four hours. We were not propely communicated about the doctor's availability.
Since it was emergency situation we were totally disappinted by the way we were treated. We should have received proper communication from faculties who were working there on our queries, but unfortunately we did not.

I would like you make some improvements in process you follow, to treat patients who come for emergency.I suggest you to arrange some additional doctors in emergency department since patience cannot wait for long time. I would also recommand you to educate your faculties to properly communicate if there is any delay so that patients can plan their activities accordigly. It would be grateful if you consider my suggestions and make ammemdments in your emrgency care.

Thanks,
Priyankaa

Votes
Average: 3.3 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 100, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'doctors'' or 'doctor's'?
Suggestion: doctors'; doctor's
...were not propely communicated about the doctors availability. Since it was emergency s...
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Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nicated about the doctors availability. Since it was emergency situation we were tota...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 105, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...o treat patients who come for emergency.I suggest you to arrange some additional ...
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Line 8, column 220, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...nce patience cannot wait for long time. I would also recommand you to educate you...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, by the way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.48453608247 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 895.0 937.175257732 95% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26470588235 4.54256449028 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90164611437 2.54303337028 114% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.694117647059 0.622605031667 111% => OK
syllable_count: 284.4 290.88556701 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.41237113402 120% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6069387058 44.8134815571 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4444444444 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8888888889 16.8248392259 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 4.34317383033 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340768129484 0.216113520407 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113841168715 0.0766984524023 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0751280049107 0.0603063233224 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151029963762 0.12726935374 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811071131961 0.0580467560999 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 8.37731958763 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 70.7449484536 63% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 8.71597938144 152% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 41.2886597938 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 8.62886597938 81% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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