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you were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to complain to the supermarket. write a letter to the manager of the supermarket . in your letter1. say who you are2. give details about the accident3. suggest how the supermarket could p

Essay topics: you were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to complain to the supermarket. write a letter to the manager of the supermarket . in your letter
1. say who you are
2. give details about the accident
3. suggest how the supermarket could prevent a similar accident

mazeda khatun mitu's picture

dear sir,

Hope you are fine. I am ms Maz and one of the regular customers of your supermarket. I was always happy to come here because this place is so organized and always find what I want and the quality of the product is very good. But recently one of the incidents happened to me for that I am really disappointed for your staff. last Sunday when I am doing my shopping suddenly I fall down to the floor without any notice. For some time I am really stuck what was happened to me and how it happens. then I realize there was water in the floor that means when your stuff cleans the place they do not do it properly. I immediately inform to your stuff. After that I went to the hospital for my checkup is there anything wrong or is it fine. For the sake of God, everything is fine but there was a chance to a happened worse case. for that reason, I think it is important to inform you because you are the manager and you have the authority to tell them to do their work more carefully. Otherwise, there will be more scope to happened this kind of accident again and again and I think it is not good for your supermarket reputation. Hope you will think about my concern.

Thanks
Maz

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Dear
dear sir, Hope you are fine. I am ms Maz...
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Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
dear sir, Hope you are fine. I am ms Maz and one o...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Last
... am really disappointed for your staff. last Sunday when I am doing my shopping sudd...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Then
... was happened to me and how it happens. then I realize there was water in the floor ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
... was a chance to a happened worse case. for that reason, I think it is important to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, really, so, then, i think, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.48453608247 187% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 26.3917525773 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 965.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 229.0 206.0 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.21397379913 4.54256449028 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3366811819 2.54303337028 92% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528384279476 0.622605031667 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 313.2 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2062566331 44.8134815571 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.2307692308 76.5299724578 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6153846154 16.8248392259 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 4.34317383033 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.29896907216 23% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162343105711 0.216113520407 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559046176794 0.0766984524023 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627546745133 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163940683666 0.12726935374 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0580467560999 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 8.37731958763 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 70.7449484536 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.84 8.71597938144 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.27 7.59969072165 83% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 41.2886597938 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum two paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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