You work for a company and need time off work

Essay topics:

You work for a company and need time off work

Dear Miss Hilary,

I am writing to inform you that I would like some time off work next week. I would actually need about 5 working days to enable me visit my mother, who just underwent a cardiac operation.

Actually, my mum just had a heart transplant at the Nottingham University Teaching hospital, last week Monday and could not make it to the hospital, because of the ongoing major project which was at its critical stage. But now, I think it is safe to visit her, now that the project is at the point of delivery, which will be handled by another department. Unfortunately, my aunt who had been staying with her needs to resume work and I have no choice other than to stay with my mummy while she is recuperating as I am her only surviving child.

However, Mr Harrison, my colleague and job sharing mate, has agreed to take on my duties while i will be away and should any emergency come up, my phone will be on and I can always hook up on the office intranet and work from home if need be.

I know how much my absence from work mean to the company but I hope you will grant me the days I need.

Yours sincerely,

Faith James.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...her only surviving child. However, Mr Harrison, my colleague and job sharing m...
^^
Line 7, column 97, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
..., has agreed to take on my duties while i will be away and should any emergency c...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, so, while, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 4.92783505155 244% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 941.0 937.175257732 100% => OK
No of words: 215.0 206.0 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.37674418605 4.54256449028 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39077911363 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 127.690721649 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.66511627907 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 289.8 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.41237113402 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.9847283468 44.8134815571 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.625 76.5299724578 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.875 16.8248392259 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 4.34317383033 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236264395876 0.216113520407 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106366324276 0.0766984524023 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10570211265 0.0603063233224 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176714599602 0.12726935374 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112362891955 0.0580467560999 194% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 8.37731958763 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 70.7449484536 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.42 8.71597938144 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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