You work for a company and you need to take some time off work.you want to ask your manager about it.in your letter writeExplain why you want to work to take time off.give details of the amount of time you need.suggest how your work could be covered while

Essay topics:

You work for a company and you need to take some time off work.you want to ask your manager about it.
in your letter write
Explain why you want to work to take time off.
give details of the amount of time you need.
suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

Dear Mr. Boutorabi

I am writing this to ask some unpaid leave next month.

since I was being nominated for Tehran's best singer competition, the organizers have planned few days camp to prepare all rivals for a better performance.
To take part in this fascinating occasion, I would need to be away for 4 days, from Monday 18th to Thursday 24th. my schedule for that week is approximately light, All I have to do is checking data center servers. Zara would be able to attend these in my place, As she has all experiences in MSCA field and she is hard-working too. I have no other urgent task to do on that time.
I'm very grateful if you could allow me this time.
this competition is really important to me since I upon being a teenager.It would be my last opportunity to make my wish become true.

Sincerely
Parmia O

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr. Boutorabi I am writing this to ask some unpaid ...
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...to ask some unpaid leave next month. since I was being nominated for Tehrans ...
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Suggestion: Since
... ask some unpaid leave next month. since I was being nominated for Tehrans best ...
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Line 5, column 35, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'Tehrans the best'.
Suggestion: Tehrans the best
...h. since I was being nominated for Tehrans best singer competition, the organizers have...
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...e all rivals for a better performance. To take part in this fascinating occasio...
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...ays, from Monday 18th to Thursday 24th. my schedule for that week is approximately...
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Suggestion: I'm
...other urgent task to do on that time. Im very grateful if you could allow me thi...
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Suggestion:
...teful if you could allow me this time. this competition is really important to ...
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...ful if you could allow me this time. this competition is really important to me s...
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Suggestion: It
...ant to me since I upon being a teenager.It would be my last opportunity to make my...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.48453608247 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 686.0 937.175257732 73% => OK
No of words: 150.0 206.0 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57333333333 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.78020617076 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69118726381 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 127.690721649 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.706666666667 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 212.4 290.88556701 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1042210722 44.8134815571 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.2222222222 76.5299724578 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 16.8248392259 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.55555555556 4.34317383033 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 2.54639175258 393% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153871221022 0.216113520407 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572353999615 0.0766984524023 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526094507063 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0804307924222 0.12726935374 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610540725562 0.0580467560999 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 8.37731958763 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.93 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 7.59969072165 93% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 41.2886597938 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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