You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job Write a letter to the shop or the company which supplied the equipment In your letter Describe the problem with the equipment Explain how this problem is affecting you

Essay topics:

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or the company which supplied the equipment. In your letter

Describe the problem with the equipment
Explain how this problem is affecting your work
Say what you want the shop or company to do

I am writing to you because I have experienced an issue with the equipment, I bought in your store. I noticed that the problem is with one piece of equipment, thus, I do believe you can fix it quickly .

Usually I work at home, so the equipment I acquired is very helpful in daily my work activities; however, this morning the equipment did not turn off. Normally I charged the battery at night, so I was expecting that the battery was fully charged when I tried to put the equipment on. So, I realized that the battery was not charged.

This equipment facilitates my work in many ways and people expect my daily report on sales prediction for the day, unfortunately I have not provided that report in the last 2 days, so there is an impact on my work and the work’s team.

Therefore, I would suggest that you send me immediately a battery spare to my home address without cost and make an appointment to review my equipment for any damage occurred by this problem. Please check my home address in your system using my phone number below.

Thank you for your support.

Sincerely yours,
Phil Collins
Phone numbers 2345677889

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...hus, I do believe you can fix it quickly . Usually I work at home, so the equip...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, therefore, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 32.9175257732 118% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.85567010309 233% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 944.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 202.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67326732673 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60413676809 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59900990099 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 290.7 290.88556701 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.0730528831 44.8134815571 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4 76.5299724578 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 16.8248392259 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 4.34317383033 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326442786112 0.216113520407 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124758107846 0.0766984524023 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825619921892 0.0603063233224 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154973568159 0.12726935374 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0891954076464 0.0580467560999 154% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 8.71597938144 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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