You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment In your letter Describe the problem with the equipment Explain how this problem is affecting your wo

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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.
Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment.
In your letter
 Describe the problem with the equipment
 Explain how this problem is affecting your work
 Say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I am a level 10 employee of your organisation and my company provided laptop has malfunctioned, due to which I am unable to continue working.
The issue started few days back, when my machine started making a lot of noise. Which I assumed was due to the improper rotation of the hard disk. Consequently, this morning the laptop refused to even boot up and was throwing an exception saying that no boot device has been found. Moreover, I have run all the automatic diagnostics available, which also did not amount to anything.
Since, I am working from home currently and now that my laptop is not working, this has put a stop to any work I was doing. The remote connectivity option provided by the company is also not helping. As all the work is to be done within the client network which requires a VPN connectivity.
As per the procedure, I have raised a ticket for the replacement of my machine within the company portal. Kindly approve the request and dispatch a new machine which is compliant with the company policies.
If you have any queries regarding the ticket, please revert to this mail.

Yours Sincerely,
Gaurav Upadhyay

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'employee' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'employees'.
Suggestion: employees
...tter to inform you that I am a level 10 employee of your organisation and my company pro...
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Line 4, column 80, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... machine started making a lot of noise. Which I assumed was due to the improper rotat...
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Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ded by the company is also not helping. As all the work is to be done within the c...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, moreover, regarding, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 4.92783505155 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.03092783505 297% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 991.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 210.0 206.0 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71904761905 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68927912687 2.54303337028 106% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 127.690721649 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 307.8 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5842105166 44.8134815571 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5833333333 76.5299724578 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 16.8248392259 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.91666666667 4.34317383033 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 7.41237113402 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183609352739 0.216113520407 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060379133552 0.0766984524023 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429000370499 0.0603063233224 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941480728819 0.12726935374 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396275788907 0.0580467560999 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 70.7449484536 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 8.71597938144 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 7.59969072165 108% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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