You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment In your letter describe the problem with the equipment explain how this problem is affecting your wo

Dear Mr Brown,

I am writing a letter to express my concern about the problem with our company's laptop which found the hard disk of the laptop is being out of service that may cause a lot of trouble on our schedule.

I cannot save and open files often in these two days, so I investigate the computer in detail. Finally, I discovered that there were a lot of bad segments in the hard disk partition that cause the files to corrupt. Since we have an indispensable project on my hand that should summit to the customer a month later, and the project information is in my current hard disk.

In this case, I am afraid all data will be lost due to the hard disk being out of order which causes our project cannot to meet the deadline. Therefore, in order to rescue all data on my laptop, I would like to request new external storage and hard disk for backup and reinstalling the laptop system.

I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,
Chris Wong

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Mr Brown, I am writing a letter to express my con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, look, may, so, therefore, i am afraid

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 32.9175257732 70% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.85567010309 52% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 802.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 179.0 206.0 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48044692737 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39940069294 2.54303337028 94% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597765363128 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.4662456777 44.8134815571 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.25 76.5299724578 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 16.8248392259 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 4.34317383033 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.49484536082 268% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10063987203 0.216113520407 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0447557741396 0.0766984524023 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480849815373 0.0603063233224 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0586405896476 0.12726935374 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502442236917 0.0580467560999 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 8.37731958763 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.0 8.71597938144 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 41.2886597938 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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