You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. in your letterDescribe the problem with equipmentExplain how this problem is affecting your workSay

Essay topics:

You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job.

Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. in your letter

Describe the problem with equipment

Explain how this problem is affecting your work

Say what you want the shop or company to do

Dear sir or madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the HP intel core laptop that I bought from you store 5 months ago for carrying my office work at home smoothly. It did not come out clean on my expectations as I am experiencing unsatisfactory delivery of work from the equipment. It's window does not function properly and also has problem with CD disk drive. I try hard to manage my important work on the laptop.

Yesterday, in the middle of the meeting through video conferencing it shut down unexpectedly and has not started yet that hampered agenda of meeting due to which a crucial deal could not final.

The device contains a lot of essential data and recovery of it is extremely important to run my job effectively. Although customer care engineer visited and checked for the problem, they suggested to take assistance from the company.

Hopefully, you will pay immediate attention to this matter.

I really look forward to your consideration.

Yours faithfully

Liza

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear sir or madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfacti...
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Line 5, column 344, Rule ID: CD_DISC[1]
Message: Use simply 'CD'.
Suggestion: CD
...tion properly and also has problem with CD disk drive. I try hard to manage my importan...
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Line 13, column 188, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested taking'.
Suggestion: suggested taking
...sited and checked for the problem, they suggested to take assistance from the company. Hopefull...
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Line 21, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...our consideration. Yours faithfully Liza
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.48453608247 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 32.9175257732 67% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 850.0 937.175257732 91% => OK
No of words: 169.0 206.0 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02958579882 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.78020617076 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9805691712 2.54303337028 117% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.721893491124 0.622605031667 116% => OK
syllable_count: 257.4 290.88556701 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7453194346 44.8134815571 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.0 76.5299724578 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.2 4.34317383033 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227307008032 0.216113520407 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0779608853862 0.0766984524023 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451324235709 0.0603063233224 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889290419572 0.12726935374 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458052886458 0.0580467560999 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 8.37731958763 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 70.7449484536 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 7.45979381443 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 8.71597938144 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 7.59969072165 115% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.