You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months, say how your work could be done while you are away, ask for his/her help in arranging it
Dear Leena,
I have been a significant performer for last consecutive four years. I am inclined to learn more about the strategies that are used in our marketing department. To achieve this I would like to request you to allow me to be sponsored to work in our head office for at least 6 months. Hence, I am writing this letter for your permission. I would like to work in the Marketing O level team that is in our main office in New Jersey. I have been very keen on developing my skills to enable our team overcome all the issues we have faced in last few months during the decline of the orders from Asian countries. I have learned that in our head quarter we have experienced experts who have profound erudition on how to overcome such situations.
Even when I am away I will ensure that all the work in my department is completed on time. I will monitor all the work through our online system and make sure that nothing is hampered due to my absence. Furthermore, I have been training few of the new employees who are well-trained now, and ready to handle all the work. It's a humble request to please help arrange my visa and stay in the new location. Finally, please also arrange my transfer documents by discussing the same with the HR Manager.
Thanking you
Poonam
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Leena, I have been a significant performer for ...
^^^
Line 3, column 608, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ine of the orders from Asian countries. I have learned that in our head quarter w...
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Line 3, column 740, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even when” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ion on how to overcome such situations. Even when I am away I will ensure that all the wo...
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Line 4, column 322, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
... now, and ready to handle all the work. Its a humble request to please help arrange...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, hence, if, so, well, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 32.9175257732 109% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 26.3917525773 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1047.0 937.175257732 112% => OK
No of words: 234.0 206.0 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47435897436 4.54256449028 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56631314966 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 127.690721649 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576923076923 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 332.1 290.88556701 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2767142944 44.8134815571 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5384615385 76.5299724578 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 16.8248392259 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 4.34317383033 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209617401498 0.216113520407 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076830139164 0.0766984524023 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778011769055 0.0603063233224 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143291728189 0.12726935374 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667498258031 0.0580467560999 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 8.37731958763 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.35 8.71597938144 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.