You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six monthsSay how your w

Essay topics:

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:

Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months
Say how your work could be done while you are away
Ask for his/her help in arranging it

Dear Mr William,

I am writing this letter to express my interest in working at our company headquarters located in the United States for a short period of time.

As you are aware we have started developing the software for the Underground mining products at our offshore design centre. I would like to travel to our company headquarters and work there for a period of six months to acquire detailed knowledge about the product for which we develop software solutions. This is quite essential to build an effective software that meets customer expectations.

During my absence, I would like my colleague Mr Adam to take over my work in supporting the software team as a product owner. I have already discussed the travel plans with him and made him aware of the responsibilities of the role, so we can continue with the software development during my absence. Finally, I would need your support to get the approvals for the travel plan which I feel would really help us to get the product developed with a 100% success rate.

I look forward to a positive reply from you.

Yours Sincerely,

Name

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ocated in the United States for a short period of time. As you are aware we have started de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, look, really, so, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 5.05154639175 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 923.0 937.175257732 98% => OK
No of words: 190.0 206.0 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85789473684 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74850248826 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 115.0 127.690721649 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605263157895 0.622605031667 97% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 290.88556701 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.2299630176 44.8134815571 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.555555556 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 16.8248392259 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 4.34317383033 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205260381567 0.216113520407 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867858526826 0.0766984524023 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598577077642 0.0603063233224 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112150919974 0.12726935374 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439313943926 0.0580467560999 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 8.71597938144 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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