You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six monthsSay how your w

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing this letter to express my interest to spend at Redmond, United State head office of our company for a short period of six months.

As you are aware, we are providing our software assistance for the development of the project related to the Cloud Data Center design for Microsoft. Now, they are asking us to provide some critical implementation about how we can provide an automated version of their actual data integration part. For this, it is vital to understand the design of our current tangible Data Center working to acquire detailed knowledge and provide reliable software to the client.

During my absence, Mrs. William will take care of the software development part, I have already provided the information about the roles and responsibilities of the Project Lead. We have also discussed my travel plans, and she is ready to handle the software development part in my absence. Finally, I would need your support to get approvals for my travel arrangement which I think would be best for delivering a successful and robust software to the client.

I look forward to an optimistic reply from you.

Your Sincerely,
ABC

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 128, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Center) must be used with a third-person verb: 'designs'.
Suggestion: designs
...roject related to the Cloud Data Center design for Microsoft. Now, they are asking us ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, look, so, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 32.9175257732 82% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.85567010309 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 980.0 937.175257732 105% => OK
No of words: 195.0 206.0 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02564102564 4.54256449028 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.785630452 2.54303337028 110% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641025641026 0.622605031667 103% => OK
syllable_count: 306.0 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6632465267 44.8134815571 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 76.5299724578 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 16.8248392259 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 4.34317383033 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202966570705 0.216113520407 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0741075178575 0.0766984524023 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062450608573 0.0603063233224 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113339551858 0.12726935374 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540956424237 0.0580467560999 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 70.7449484536 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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