Nowadays, some celebrities such as film stars, sportsmen and pop musicians are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which jobs should be highly paid?
There has been several debates over the topic whether film stars, sportsmen and musicians should have high remunerations. I agree that celebrities receive high salaries and it is acceptable for several reasons. In the following paragraphs I will put the arguments and also mention a few professions that should also be highly paid.
Firstly, these celebrities represent the entire country to the world. These celebrities work hard to entertain us by going through hours of practice sessions. Through their performance, these celebrities not only entertain us, but also upholds our countrys’ culture and values in front of the whole world. These celebrities have a short career span. They join the industry at the age of 19-20 and retire by 33-35 years. Their remaining years end up in struggles.
Secondly, their privacy is hampered due to the paparazzi following them everywhere. Furthermore, even their spouse and children do not have privacy and needs security. They do not have the luxuries of the ordinary people.
However, there are other occupations that should also receive higher salaries. For example, the doctors and nurses spend years studying and they undergo many tribulations to be able to treat a patient better. Then, there are people who protect our country, such as the army, navy and marines. They sacrifice their family lives and their safety to give us a peaceful and secure lives. We should also not forget the police officers and the firefighters who risks their lives to keep us safe and maintain order.
To conclude, I would like to reiterate that celebrities like the film stars, sportsmen and musicians bring glory to our country through their performances and by sacrificing their privacy. On the other hand, there are a number of other jobs that also requires a lot of efforts and deserve a lucrative salary.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13621262458 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68736882333 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574750830565 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 475.2 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1255888775 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.3684210526 106.682146367 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8421052632 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163343675632 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460098584075 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456100044072 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917483813011 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768171571232 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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