You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:Describe the training course you want to doExplain what the company could do to he

Essay topics:

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
Describe the training course you want to do
Explain what the company could do to help you
Say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Mr.Smith,

I am writing with regard to a database administration training course that would be beneficial for my career and having been published in local newspaper, dated 24th of July.

It would be a great chance for me to attend this course that is going to be held in the Ferdowsi University of Mashhad. The tutor of the course is Mr.Mehrpouya who is an expert in this field. I have been working as web and Query developer for more than 6 years and I believe that it is now time for me to broaden my knowledge and learn something new about database administration.

I would be grateful if you could support me with paying the tuition of the training course. I did enquiry about the terms and conditions of attending this course as well as the fees. It was $240 for this training course that would be started on 24th of June and lasted till 29th December.

This training course will impact my knowledge in working with a wide range of databases including Microsoft SQL server, Oracle and the Microsoft access 2016. It would provide us with the knowledge of developing the clients’ computer programs with these databases that are popular all around the world with high security schemes.

Thanks for your help and support and look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,
Rahi Honarvar

Votes
Average: 8.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Smith
Dear Mr.Smith, I am writing with regard to a datab...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Mehrpouya
... Mashhad. The tutor of the course is Mr.Mehrpouya who is an expert in this field. I have ...
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Line 7, column 93, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ing the tuition of the training course. I did enquiry about the terms and conditi...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, well, as well as, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 7.48453608247 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 32.9175257732 94% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1096.0 937.175257732 117% => OK
No of words: 227.0 206.0 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8281938326 4.54256449028 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 3.78020617076 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65590910425 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 127.690721649 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5859030837 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 318.6 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.1547643661 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6363636364 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6363636364 16.8248392259 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.18181818182 4.34317383033 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276017909507 0.216113520407 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110180928823 0.0766984524023 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550556262164 0.0603063233224 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157063215881 0.12726935374 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583516544024 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 8.37731958763 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 7.59969072165 106% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 41.2886597938 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.4606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.25 Out of 9
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