You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.Write a letter to your manager. In your letter•Describe the training course you want to do•Explain what the company could do

Essay topics:

You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.

Write a letter to your manager. In your letter

• Describe the training course you want to do

• Explain what the company could do to help you

• Say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Mr.Gery,

I am Neha Patel working as Senior Quality Analyst under your department. I am writing this letter proposing a request to permit me to join a foreign language training class as advert in today’s newspaper.

To begin with, we being an international company are continuously engaged with clients who speak various languages. An advertisement of foreign language coaching course, in today’s Economic Times, caught my attention. Candidates can either enroll for Batch 1 - two months full time (4 hours) or Batch 2 - six months part time (2 hours) course to learn Spanish/German/Thai language which is awarded with a diploma certificate upon completion.

Furthermore, considering our current project pipeline, I could foresee that I can easily opt for Batch 2, provided I get authorization of signing off an hour early for next six months. Also, I can compensate any unfinished task by working from home. I assure you that work will not be hampered as a result of this training.

Lastly, even though we use English as a medium of communication in our organization, it is not true for our newly partnered client from Bangkok whose first language is Thai. They find it difficult to clearly communicate and many a times lead us to misunderstand the real meaning. To eradicate this issue, I am keen to learn their language for effortless communication and prove an asset to our company.

I kindly request your careful consideration for this suggestion.

Yours faithfully,

Neha Patel.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Gery
Dear Mr.Gery, I am Neha Patel working as Senior...
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Line 9, column 278, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... either enroll for Batch 1 - two months full time 4 hours or Batch 2 - six months part ti...
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Line 9, column 320, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ll time 4 hours or Batch 2 - six months part time 2 hours course to learn Spanish/German...
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Line 9, column 337, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r Batch 2 - six months part time 2 hours course to learn Spanish/German/Thai lang...
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Line 17, column 231, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a time' or simply 'times'?
Suggestion: a time; times
...fficult to clearly communicate and many a times lead us to misunderstand the real meani...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, lastly, so, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 32.9175257732 97% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 26.3917525773 99% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.85567010309 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 937.175257732 138% => OK
No of words: 243.0 206.0 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30452674897 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 3.78020617076 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20810614271 2.54303337028 126% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 127.690721649 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.695473251029 0.622605031667 112% => OK
syllable_count: 383.4 290.88556701 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 1.44329896907 277% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0799350363 44.8134815571 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1538461538 76.5299724578 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6923076923 16.8248392259 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 4.34317383033 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256179611833 0.216113520407 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803865763144 0.0766984524023 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431109090205 0.0603063233224 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124471031004 0.12726935374 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318875072005 0.0580467560999 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 8.37731958763 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 70.7449484536 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 8.71597938144 154% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 7.59969072165 119% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 41.2886597938 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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